Monikamoddev: clothes - hoodie for monika ( warning huge ppictures)

[bittercaramel]

ive been working on this shit for past week or something
its still ugly but i really enjoyed working on it
i really wanted to learn how to shade more stylistic, anime, simply i dont know
i always shaded my shit with this realistic shading idk why
i really try not to but still i have to add the fucking additional line

so this was a great study for me, yet i dont think itll make it to the game because lets face it
its not too good
im shit at anime style
it was a fucking struggle with this whole lineart
i hate lineart
and my good ol computer almost blew up from the number of layers so watch out people who will open it xD

tho i tried
here ya go with some previews
(ignore the additional hand in second preview, just forgot to turn off that layer xDDd)

and heres the download link with whole this shit
also i made her new right hand because i thought the old one looked weird ... kinda too small? still looks off but i think it's better
tho i didnt delete the old one just in case yea
n the download
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1Pvole5-0-STRDdLf1jGroKY4wGzbgtlF?usp=sharing
any critics is strictly forbidden appreciated

[Delcos]

cute

[softombre]

It looks nice but the folds on the sleeves are a little weird, I can't explain but they dont look very natural,,,

[bittercaramel]

It looks nice but the folds on the sleeves are a little weird, I can't explain but they dont look very natural,,,

oh maybe
im not sure because i cant see that ; \ any idea how to fix this?

[multimokia]

I think one issue is that the style of the hoodie doesn't really match the style of the room, or Monika either, looking at the linework too.

[bittercaramel]

I think one issue is that the style of the hoodie doesn't really match the style of the room, or Monika either, looking at the linework too.

well i tried
linework... i dont know
i just cant ;\ still i can try n fix it but if not its ok
im ok with that idgaf anyway

[ghost]

There are lot of errors, too. Especially evident at the leaning pose, where you can see part of her elbow sticking out of the sleeve. There are also parts where the coloring doesn't match up with the linework as well :/

[ghost]

Also what software/hardware are you using? I might have some suggestions how to improve the linework.

[bittercaramel]

There are lot of errors, too. Especially evident at the leaning pose, where you can see part of her elbow sticking out of the sleeve. There are also parts where the coloring doesn't match up with the linework as well :/

i said, i forgot to turn off layer with the other hand
its not permanent or anything

Also what software/hardware are you using? I might have some suggestions how to improve the linework.

photoshop

[AsuraShun]

Really cute

[antimockingjay]

This looks great! I love the color, it ties in nicely with her favorite ice cream flavor being mint! Plus it's green, to compliment her eyes!

I might suggest changing the chest a bit though. At least in my experience, fabric doesn't conform _quite_ that much to the shape of the chest. A certain degree of conforming to the skin is normal, especially with certain materials, but a pullover hoodie doesn't really have that, being a slightly thicker material. I'd say this would be a fairly good example:

See how the hoodie isn't perfectly conforming to the curve, especially the underside? Think of it like you have a plank, and a tennis ball. If you put the plank upright, then nail the tennis ball to the plank, then drape a piece of fabric over it, it isn't going to conform to the tennis ball. Same thing on a human body. The only way it really does something like that is if the fabric is wet and sticking to the skin.

I'd also consider making the strings a different color to make it easier to differentiate between the strings and the hoodie itself. That's just me, though, because it almost seems like the strings kinda fade into the hoodie. Maybe you could make it even more of a reference to the ice cream by having it be brown, so it's like mint chocolate chip.

And finally, I think there might be something... Off... About the hood itself. It almost looks like a turtleneck with the neck folded down, rather than the hood of a hoodie. I'd suggest bringing it in a bit, so it isn't on the shoulders as much.

These are all, of course, just suggestions and constructive criticism. I think the hoodie as it is, is an amazing start. And I think you're doing an absolutely amazing job. Good luck with the drawing!! :D

[ghost]

Are you a mouse user? If so, Photoshop has Pen Tool that can definitely help you make your lines smoother. Below you can see my own submission that was done using that very tool.

[bittercaramel]

nope im using a tablet and i absolutely cant stand the way the fucking "pen" works
i just dunno it sux sorry
btw ur submission is great tho the lines are too like, they have no thickness variation like in original artstyle
sorry for bringing ur work into this, just thought i would mention that
@antimockingjay thx so much bro
ill change the color of strings
about the hood, i based it off of my hoodies and pictures i found on the internet
idk maybe u r right tho i wouldnt change it if it isnt necessary because im lazy and have 0 motivation to live
and yeah u r right about the chest and stuff
my little cousin also told me this but i didnt listen cuz i hate this little brat
ill... try to fix that... tho it might take like next week or two because its veery hard for me to find energy and motivation
i almost dont get out of the bed till like 2pm ;\
well thanks everyone for advice

[Professor-JMO]

_Oh!_
Maybe if there was a emerald green heart above one of the oppai and it looked like it was stitched in.
I think that it would not only look cute and distinguishing but also compliment those 👀.

-_Just My Opinion_

[bittercaramel]

oh yeah i could do this
i think id rather make it like brown or something since the whole hoodie is green and even if it was different shade it wouldnt show too much
and it would match the idea of the strings being brown =u=

[Sujeito17]

~This makes me want a Assassin's Creed Monika~